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lingling

LZ., good job!
3 N! c: O5 ]; x0 ^  [) d/ M3 i( eI just doubt if sometimes you use more commas than necessary. For example, before OR and after BUT you do not need have a comma.

mayjiay28

good to learn the different culture~ look forward to ur diary 2morrow

learnEnglish

LZ., good job!
I just doubt if sometimes you use more commas than necessary. For example, before OR and after BUT you do not need have a comma.
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Thanks.I have just edited it.

learnEnglish

good to learn the different culture~ look forward to ur diary 2morrow
; m0 I9 W" Y7 _* S) u" U% kmayjiay28 发表于 2009-8-6 17:42

Thanks for your encouragement

牛奶咖啡

Thanks for 小米and方格's help.
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7 }" k/ ~' j8 _7 U  q' W8 eI meant that birthday man is important person for me.
7 L& G- H/ X+ ~4 A" cOf course,my friend is more important than him.
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Thank 小米and方格 again.
learnEnglish 发表于 2009-8-4 14:25

' H9 T% u, \* p1 abirthday boy 比较常说的。

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Do you ask me this problem because。。
. \; y8 P; ?$ h9 W" t5 j 人可以ask question 也可以cause problem..通常不ask problem, 除非 ask for problem..

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亲，有几条我就一起说啦
& l+ t% D" ]; u2 K1. 关于 too tired but happy
这个汉语里的非常 直接换用 too 不太合适，因为too有导出下文否定含义的功能。。
另外这句话和下句直接最好用连词，比如表原因的，串成一句。不然整篇都是简单句的罗列，会觉得单调。
2. 关于牛羊肉，那个宰杀的动词应该和有生命的名词搭配使用，已经成了肉就不用杀了。。
8 D' G  K. d7 j5 V! D$ m3. In other words, Muslims don't eat non-halal-meat, either.
9 E" h8 v/ t/ D4 T8 q) i5 O: r6 d! g这个句子很好， 但是这个either 离前一个否定结构太远了， 读者未必能跟上亲的思路。。
4. brought some halal-beef and halal-chicken for himself.
4 ?+ C0 u" b) ^! o; T( I 这句话里用 bring along sth. with sb. 比较好。。

learnEnglish

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Do you ask me this problem because。。
人可以ask question 也可以cause problem..通常不ask problem, 除非 ask for problem..
" L) ?* u' n+ ?( X3 E牛奶咖啡 发表于 2009-8-8 01:44

4 ]. u% U* W$ c9 c; a( t- g% w# ^. RThank you very very much
5 c- k6 m, s" z# n: {: X(Did you ask me this question because you had seen I had written "I am using the pink phone"?)

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21# learnEnglish

$ _  [9 n( ~+ S: j亲，有几条我就一起说啦
2 Q! j9 X5 S$ _% R5 |  X1. 关于 too tired but happy
6 j; }; m' V4 Z! ]* F8 D) h6 @" ~4 C这个汉语里的非常 直接换用 too 不太合适，因为too有导出下文否定含义的功能。。
另外这句话和下句直接最好用连词，比如表原因的，串 ...
牛奶咖啡 发表于 2009-8-8 01:59

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8 W/ @0 l; T# {0 T# MI edited (1), thank 咖啡
2 r3 @! D9 M$ h( ^$ J( G% _% q( z: l# S(2)(3) don't know how to edit...
4 z( o' F3 _' r0 P0 s(4)I want to emphasize "for himself", not "for others"...

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